Not Sad Enough
I suggest that a piece talking about slavery should be as sad and angry as Mahler. And that's what this piece is missing. The melody seems to be a bit too jolly and does not really symphonise the chorus at the back. Besides, the use of string-hitting seems to be ruining the sadness of the piece.
It does not sound like a Royal March at all.
It sounds to me more like a ballroom or breakdance piece rather than a processional march, which should sound more enriched and harmonic. Please listen to the works of G.Händel and C.-F.Gounod and try to learn from them.
OK, thanks for pointing that out, but a song isn't all about the name. Couldn't you tell me a little about the song itself, nextime?
May I introduce you to MaestroRage and MilkmanDan, who may consider to teach you how to compose a symphony instead of a cacophony?
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I think you can improve a little bit more on the arrangement of chords and background. Besides, your tunes does not seem to symbolise storm, but coldness or silence instead. How about changing the title to "The Icy Wall Between You and I" or things similar to this?
I find this piece useful for scenes in which a character falls into memories of mental struggles.
I'm pretty sure that this is live.
I did parts of i live on my MIDI piano. Im not too good at the piano though :(
I did just the easy parts. thanks for the ten!
You have potential, brother.
I can see you DO have potential powers in composing. Keep up your good work and do more improvement, brother.
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I'm a Chick. LOL. XD So how about sister instead :P And thank you very much ^_^ I hope to keep improving. I just need to get the hang of doing this...
This is plagiarism!
For Gods' sake, don't do this again.
0/5 and 0/10.
Plagiarism would be me claiming this as my own work...
Which I have clearly stated this is was composed by Modest Mussorgsky.
Practice more, please.
Not professional at all.
Your piece works.
It gave me courage to re-think about why my past was so sad, instead of simply feeling sad of it.You deserve 5/5 and 10/10.
Thank you very much for the review and for telling me how this piece made you feel. It's people like you that keep us composers motivated!
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